題目：
Some argue that we should use cleaner energy sources to protect the environment, while others believe traditional energy sources like coal and oil are better because they are less expensive. What is your opinion?
開頭段：
Energy lies the foundation of the modern society. As the rapid development of our society, the demand for energy has reached an unprecedented level. However, when it comes to the discussion whether people should use cleaner energy sources instead of traditional energy sources, people have different responses. As far as I am concerned, it is more advisable for people to use cleaner energy sources in order to protect our environment and guarantee the economy thrive(, even though the traditional energy sources seem to be less costly).
主體段1：
(主體段的第一句話，一定要直接寫觀點，不要拐彎。)
To begin with, it is necessary for modern people to explore and use cleaner energy sources to protect the environment, since the environment is very critical for us to survive and maintain healthy. The past few decades have witnessed the great damage on the environment that exceeding use of traditional energy sources have brought. For example, the widely use of coal and oil has generated a huge number of harmful gas, such as SO2, which contributes primarily to the acid rain. The acid rain could destroy numerous crops and also heavily damage historical architectures, leading to enormous loss both in economic and cultural aspects. In this way, we are supposed to reduce the use of traditional energy sources and enhance the application of cleaner energy, such as solar, wind and tidal energy, all of which bring little impact on our environment. Widely use of cleaner energy will definitely improve our environment and thus benefit our economic development as well as culture prosperity.
主體段2：
(第一句運用對比提出觀點。)
In addition, using cleaner energy sources will entitle people more chances to earn more profits in the long run, while relying on traditional energy sources could increase the risk of profit reduction and even bankrupt. Since the traditional energy sources, like coal and oil, are limited on earth and they usually require centuries to regenerate, the traditional energy sources cannot satisfy our use as the society develops rapidly. In this way, the traditional energy could become more and more expensive if our most industries keep depending on them. It is conceivable that the industries would be hard to advance because of the lack of traditional energy sources. Only when companies or industries are able to take advantage of cleaner energy sources, such as solar, wind, and tide, which can supply energy constantly,can they develop and achieve booming in the future.
結尾段：
On the basis of the above discussion, using cleaner energy is a feasible and favorable(壓頭韻哦~) strategy for people to survive and thrive in the future as the traditional energy sources gradually become depleted and protecting environment become more and more important.
(注：此篇是童老師在學員原文基礎上進行的修改版~)
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